Reflective Writing
During my secondary school days, I did not make the effort to study as academic results was not my top priority. This caused my ‘O’ level results to be poor and when I first saw my result slip, I was devastated and wanted to give up on my studies. When my elder sister saw this, she took the chance to talk to me. She said that ‘O’ level is just another chapter of my life. Even though I was unable to get into my dream school (Ngee Ann Polytechnic), I can still strive in other polytechnics. She asked me “why give up when you are still so young?” This triggered me to reflect and my conclusion was that I am not going to give up on myself.When I first entered Nanyang Polytechnic, I made it a point to be attentive during lectures and soon learned to take initiatives in asking my lecturer questions. This had helped me tremendously in my learning process. I realized that I have missed out the fun in studying and that with the correct mindset; it is possible for a “failing” student to do well. With determination, I made it to NUS.
To end, there is a meaningful statement told to me by one of my lecturers which I hold dearly to me - “you might be the ‘Superman’ in this course, but when you enter a university, there will be more ‘Superman’ and you will become a normal person again”. This sentence is my source of motivation to always be ready to learn and improve myself continuously.
Hey Katie! Your reflection and insight have been really invaluable to me. I like the whole idea of it - only hard work will bring one far. I especially like the "superman" quote you have used and to be honest, it actually reminds me that I have to work hard too to get to my goal. Thanks for sharing! :-)
ReplyDeleteHey Katie, your reflection is quite inspiring and I'm quite sure this testimony of yours will continue to motivate your peers and friends. Continue to have this positive mindset to work towards your goal of being 'superman' among many 'superman'. Maybe you could elaborate what was the reason why you did not make any effort in studies? For example, was it because of laziness,peer influence, etc.? With that, you could emphasise what you did in the past, and you would not want to repeat again in future under the conclusion section. :):):)
ReplyDeleteHi Katie, your reflection has given me the conscious to start reflecting on myself too. In fact, I am guilty right now. From secondary till date, I have been always standing on a thin line between making into the next desired school or not. It is just like the current situation where even though I can get into NUS, it is not the desired course I wanted, and so this serves me right for always not putting in 100% effort and just barely making it into NUS. You mentioned that your elder sister has motivated you. And well, I can tell you that your reflection has started to motivate me. Great content covered and I'm impressed with your ending quote. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteKatie,
ReplyDeleteYour reflective writing is very meaningful and it is very inspiring! You were very lucky to have such a good sister who taught you not to give up. Many of us go through obstacles in our learning journey; continue to work hard, persevere through difficulties and don't give up.
Ok, now let me comment on your work:
Content and organisation: In addition to what I said above, the ideas you put down flowed very coherently. You began with a description of a problem in the past and what you did to improve. You reflected on what people told you, what that meant to you, what you did to improve on it, and what you will do to continue to improve.
Language:
1. Note the use of tenses here. Both verbs referred to events in the past, but one is in present tense and the other in past tense.
i. Even though I was unable to get into my dream school (Ngee Ann Polytechnic), I can still strive in other polytechnics.
ii. This triggered me to reflect and my conclusion was that I am not going to give up on myself.
2. Should the following sentence be 'lecturer+s'?
When I first entered Nanyang Polytechnic, I made it a point to be attentive during lectures and soon learned to take initiatives in asking my lecturer questions.
3. I realized that I have missed out the fun in studying and that with the correct mindset; it is possible for a “failing” student to do well.
i. One error is that in English we say 'miss out' + ON the fun...
ii. We have talked about the use of commas and semicolons. Think about the use of semicolon in your sentence.
4. Use of relative pronouns (E.g. who, where, which, what, that and how). Can you spot the error in the sentence below?
To end, there is a meaningful statement told to me by one of my lecturers WHICH I hold dearly to me -
Dear Misty Cook,
DeleteThank you for your feedback on my reflective writing, these followings are the corrections I have made.
1.(i)Even though I was unable to get into my dream school (Ngee Ann Polytechnic), I could have strived in other polytechnics.
(ii) This triggered me to reflect and I have come to this conclusion that I was not going to give up on myself.
2. When I first entered Nanyang Polytechnic, I made it a point to be attentive during lectures and soon learned to take initiatives in asking my lecturers questions.
3. I realized that I have miss out on the fun in studying and that with the correct mindset, it is possible for a “failing” student to do well.
4. To end, there is a meaningful statement told to me by one of my lecturers that I hold dearly to me